Saturday, February 12, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday #2

This Six Sentence Sunday post is an excerpt from my second book, Blowing Embers, due out this summer:


Too late Kiera understood, and before she could send a sheet of air deep into the winter’s dead soil between them, the knife’s-blade claws broke through to her side of the shield. Without pausing, he leapt up and back, lifted the shield, and Kiera, off the ground. A vision of trees, mountains, fog, and sky flashed across her eyes, and her breath, and the elemental air that she held, oomphed out when her back slammed into the snow.  
An enormous naked man landed on top of her, a rare grin lighting his face. For a moment, she stared into deep brown eyes set in a god’s rugged mien, skin as dark and warm as umber, as the wind blew a tendril of black hair across his jaw.
“Damn it,” she wheezed. 

31 comments:

  1. Wow! Where did this naked man come from? Maybe he can keep her warm in the snow, or she can keep him warm. ;)

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  2. Just a thought: I'd say "lifting the shield" instead of "lifted the shield" ... sounds better to me.

    I do like this extract :-) Your descriptions are very vivid, leaving no doubt as to exactly what happens and how.

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  3. Thanks, Laurel. I avoid "ing" verbs as often as possible as I find them weak and imprecise. Too, I meant this description to section out each piece of action very specifically, so it isn't that I didn't know how else to write it -- I chose to list things very actively to create a certain mood. Thanks for the comment!

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  4. That's cool ... just thought I'd say how I see it :-)

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  5. I really don't see how Kiera can complain about that! :-P

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  6. Wooo! Where are all the naked beefy men in my backyard?

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  7. Do we all get a hot god-like naked man falling from the sky?

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  8. Stunning descriptions. "Enormous naked man." Are these earth and wind? If so...looking forward to a glimpse of fire and water!

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  9. An enormous naked man with a grin. Can I get one of those?

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  10. This doesn't sounds like a very bad situation to me!

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  11. How come no beefy naked guy ever falls out of the sky in my yard?

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  12. Ooo. An enormous naked man on her...We all should have one of those!

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  13. Ah, the suddenly appearing huge naked man. Where do I get one of those?

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  14. Thanks to all of you for the comments!

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  15. Beautiful, visuals like an epic movie. Fantastic!

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  16. She's mad about being jumped on by a hot naked guy?

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  17. love how visual this scene was -- and is it raining/snowing men? HELLO! fab six xx

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  18. LOL, Casi! No -- it's the failure of her magical defense she's bemoaning. ;-p

    Thanks, Jo-Anne, and everyone, for your kind comments!

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  19. What a whirlwind of a snippet! Elemental air? Claws knocking her in the air? A naked man on top of her?

    When's the book coming out again? :)

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  20. Wonderful details of setting and such a dramatic entrance...I'm sure curious!

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  21. Wow, that was an action-packed excerpt!

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  22. Great action in this scene. Damn it, indeed. Think I'd be uttering something stronger, myself, like OS! LOL

    Great sensory visuals with the snow and ice. Made me feel the cold.

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  23. Thanks, everybody, very much! The short version, J.C., is that Kiera is a mage, her "attacker" is a shifter, and this book I've excerpted from is packed with action. Due out this summer, this book is titled _Blowing Embers_, and it's book two in The Embers Series (_Fallen Embers_, book one, released September 2010). I'll send an ebook (kindle) copy of _FE_ to the first person who emails me - lauri AT lauriowen.com.

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  24. Wonderful excerpt! Really pulled me in.

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  25. I don't think my response to that would be "Damn it."

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  26. WOW! I can't wait to read it!!

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