Saturday, June 11, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday #13


Welcome to this week’s Six Sentence Sunday post! (Visit the other fab writers here.) I continue to post from Blowing Embers, the second chapter in The Embers Series, a paranormal romance/epic fantasy, set to be released in July.

Today’s snip starts right after where we left off last time. (If you’d like to refresh your memory, the prior six is posted here.)


But Laszlo slammed open the door a handful of minutes later. Without preface, he stalked to where she stood next to the window and lifted her chin with a hand. With gentle fingers, he touched her swollen eye. He pressed his lips into a thin line and looked into her face.
 A smile lifted her lips at the worry he strove so hard to conceal, but it was there, lurking just below the surface. The jaw he clenched, the eyes that narrowed just a fraction.


15 comments:

  1. Interesting apparent contrasts in mood in this bit. Intriguing ...

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  2. Yes, I absolutely love how he slams the door, then is so gentle with her. Nice six!

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  3. Agree with Jessica and Laurel!

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  4. Great description here, can picture it easily in my head.

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  5. A lot of thought contained in facial expression, without saying a word. Good.

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  6. I love how much he cares for her, and she knows it without him needing to say a word. But frankly that image makes me feel cross-eyed! x_x

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  7. Ah, if only we could all be so sure about men. Beautiful description.

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  8. The relationship between Keira and Laszlo is so elegantly shown here--great six!

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  9. Love how you got his emotions to the surface

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  10. Sweet. A caring man who tries to hide it.

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  11. Fabulous six, Lauri! I love the way you use his face to show what he's feeling. Wonderful contrasts.

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